There are a few things I think
would benefit from further
thought once your proposal is
submitted.
I think you need to take a step
back from this and rejig the
structure a little to present your
work in the best possible light.
Currently you have a lot of broken
up small points that make the
review look much more
superficial than it actually is. I
think you just need to take some
time to sort consolidate all those
'bits' into a bigger story.
1. Critical Analysis and Depth of
Relevant Literature and
Identification of Core
Concepts
Concepts are clearly identified,
but I think they require greater
depth of enquiry and discussion.
Criticality is all shoved into
section 1.1.10 in a very odd way
that feels a bit arbitrary.
2. Review of Significant
Literature, Drawing of Varied
Sources
There is a variety of material
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